Robin Jay's Feedback on The Calamity Girl - The Promotion

I received some good news yesterday.

I sent an email with a link to the first 26 pages of my manuscript and wanted an honest opinion from and Editor's view point.

Robin Jay and I have been emailing each other with some ideas this week and she was kind enough to take a look at page 1 of my manuscript.

She gave me some pointers on the way I introduce story lines to the readers.

I was jumping from one scene to another without really explaining how we got there.

I knew it was rocky but I didn't know how to fix it.

She gave me the best advice in the world.

Shorten your sentences.

Focus on one thought at a time, explain to the reader why you are there and what you are doing.

Don't leave them hanging mid sentence.

AND try not to go from past, present , future tense all in one paragraph.

Whew!
She said I am a professional writer. (big relief!)

And that I'm going to do very well, if I have some confidence in myself.

So there you have it.

I can now work on my manuscripts knowing that I am doing things right and all I need is to polish my thought process.

Now that will be difficult because I'm always jumping from one thing to another.

I guess it's okay in a blog and understandable in a text message.

But when you are writing a fictional tale for someone to read; everything has to be explained from start to finish.

Just thought I'd share that with all of you!

Robin Jay is an awesome author and business leader.  If anyone would like to pre-order her next book, please contact me.

I'm looking for sponsors.

I need $3500 dollars or 500 books pre-ordered so that I can be a co-author in her next book.

If you can help in any way please contact me or Robin and mention my name.

Sincerely with thanks!

Linda Randall